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Wednesday 3 June 2020

Writing

Hey bloggers,  Delilah here and I have a navitive writing for you and it is really good but I also want our opinion of what I need to add and that kind of stuff  I hope you like it.We have just done 1 page of our new writing workbook and it is really fun to write and here it is and if you can PS can you check out some other bogs in our class that would be very good if you can.


Here is my navitive writing 


It is 3:00 o'clock in the afternoon and Jorja was on her phone of Tiktok and she was just watching some videos and then Bella text her and then they talk Bella asked it she could come over to Jorjas house and she said yes so then they went over there and they just sat on their phones and they also talked a lot but most of the time there were attached to their phones and they text there other friends they told then to come over and … they had the biggest party on there phones yes I told you there were attached to their phones even they sleep with them that it very weird and they also talked to there friends in the middle of the night . 

The Next day … 

It is 7:00  o’clock in the morning they are still on there phones it is really weird and there mums told them to get off but they did not listen it was a nightmare their fingers just keeped on typing it was really cool to watch it just keeped on going I got really dizzy watching that Bella whent to Jorja’s house and we played some video games and it was really fun to play video games then we stopped and we hoped of our phones and it felt very weird not having a screen in front of you put it was ok.

Then we went back to our phones and we realized that we don't need phones then we gave them up  and that was the last time we ever went on a phone but then we went on it after a year and it was good not having a phone for a year and know we will not speed a lot of time on it anymore and that it a good thing that we are not on  our phones all of the time that is why you should not go on your device all of ov the time also it is not good for you.

The End 
                                          

Bye

1 comment:

  1. Hi Delilah,
    Its me here Bridget from your class. I really like your blog because you have made sure you added a DLO. I also like how you make the DLO's on canva maybe you could change every couple of days like maybe you want to try biteable. Next time you could possibly check your spelling aswell.
    But other then that Good job.
    Bridget

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